hi im new to this site heres my first poem to be posted here(no real punctuation)

[isaac rutledge-wilson]

I was in love once, but once only came once.

Reasons are uknown and feelings are unshown

For love was in vain as it cut my heart inside

Bleeding profoundly as it cried and wondered why

Thinking its because of me I know I feel inside

Then I hear the voice that cut me deep inside my heart

For one reason and one alone ive been cut where no man should bleed

My skin is that of a chest nut tree and not pale enough u see

[Alan Summers]

I really like the poem! There is an energy and readibility that I appreciate.

You mention about lack of punctuation, and there's nothing wrong with that at all, but you need to be consistent.

Your first line is a traditional sentence format for instance, and sometimes you use uppercase and sometimes you don't. You use I uppercase, but not with ive (I've).

Also have a strong think whether you want so many uppercase letters at the beginning of each line.

That being said, it's a terrific poem! It might need editing here and there, but once you decide on an overall syntax and grammatical style, I think you will find yourself on a roll!

all my very best,

Alan
With Words

One suggested layout:

I was in love once, but once only came once
reasons are unknown, feelings are not shown
for love was in vain as it cut my heart inside

bleeding profoundly as it cried and wondered why
thinking its because of me I know I feel inside

Then I hear the voice that cut me deep
inside my heart
for one reason and one alone I've been cut
where no man should bleed

My skin is that of a chest nut tree
and not pale enough you see


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