I really like the poem! There is an energy and readibility that I appreciate.
You mention about lack of punctuation, and there's nothing wrong with that at all, but you need to be consistent.
Your first line is a traditional sentence format for in…
I hope some of you can join the party! ;-)
Alan’s blog: images and info about the 1000 Verse Renga Project
With Words: website
BBC 1000 verse renga article:
BBC Poetry Season
November 7, 2009 at 6pm to November 14, 2009 at 11:45pm
A project to create a 1000 Verse Renga has been extended by a week due to popular demand.
We would love to receive is a renga verse (haikulike verse) from everyone here!
It's to help the City of Bath U.K. complete a 1000 senku renga.
For informat…
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Nice to hear from you, when I get a few minutes next week, I will explore this site in greater detail. Thanks for saying hello! I am working on a huge mosaic ball this week with installation deadline on Monday! have a great week!